Hello, great video. Your work has been a key part of my waking up.
A couple of suggestions:
The quote from the 8/1/1966 WT is actually the WT's quote of a newspaper article. That should be clarified, I think.
Also, maybe a mention of the hours spent being indoctrinated as a born-in. How would it compare to hours spent in elementary school? Make sure to tally field service and assemblies and conventions. Outsiders cannot fully appreciate how immersive this cult is. It might help.
As a tongue-in-cheek, use AC/Dc's Jailbreak song with the ending credits. You can start with Bon Scott saying "He made it out - with a bullet in his back." This segues to the chorus.
But, yes, loved it - I am going to pass it on to close friends.